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6:30

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Warm slippers kiss the carpet
like butterflies sipping nectar in spring,
the heavy coffee aroma clinging to empty rooms--
dishes piled high as a symbol of leisure:
A moment of delayed reaction which you
stole for yourself.

Wary hands smoothing frown lines,
absentminded over time, the cold
of a porcelain sink seeping deep
into waiting bones;
the surrounding air lacking the welcoming
warmth of crumpled bed sheets.

And on the window, rain knocks gently:
Hesitant, like tender embraces or
open mouthed kisses sliding down the pane.

The clock numbers flicker;
it is now 6:45.
It took me awhile to get this all put together, but I really like this poem for the possibilities.
If any of you would care to comment, I would love to see your perspective/take on this piece.
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Leap-of-Faythe's avatar
Wow, you caught the atmosphere of a lazy morning so well in this piece; kudos! I love the way you use literary devices; in particular, I loved warm slippers kiss the carpet/like butterflies sipping nectar in spring and On the window rain knocks gently/hesitant like tender embraces/open mouthed kisses sliding down the pane

Overall, I really liked this! Nice work! ^_^